Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Sir ,
I would like to inform you that your recent concert which was held in Toronto was really good.
First of all , I would like to inform you that when i was booking for you concert the prices of tickets was very high I thought its not good to spend lot of money on a concert because as I am international I know how to earn one one dollar I know the value of money but my friend forced me to book tickets.
In addition, I would like to say that it was worth it to spend money on your concert because it was a really good experience I had in my life because I went to concert in my life first time. My experience is very good and I enjoyed a lot . Moreover, your entry on the stage was like a hollywood movies what a great experience.
Finally, I would appreciate if you read my review and reply me because I am your big fan .
Thank for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from your side.
Your Faithfully
Nikhil Birla
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
You have addressed the first bullet point regarding your feelings about the performance. However, you have failed to address the second and third bullet points entirely. You did not provide any details about your own musical activities, nor did you explain how you would like the singer to help you with them. The task instructions require you to cover all three points to achieve a higher band score. Because two of the three required content areas are missing, the response is significantly underdeveloped in terms of task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'First of all', 'In addition', and 'Moreover'. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. The transition between the ticket price complaint and the enjoyment of the concert is abrupt. Additionally, the closing is a bit repetitive. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on one of the bullet points from the prompt, creating a more logical flow of information throughout the letter.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'really good' and 'good experience' are used multiple times, which restricts the range of your expression. There are also some awkward phrasings, such as 'I know how to earn one one dollar' and 'reply me'. While your meaning is generally clear, you need to use a wider variety of descriptive adjectives and more precise collocations to convey your enthusiasm and musical interests effectively. Expanding your vocabulary beyond basic, everyday words will help you achieve a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. You have issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'prices of tickets was'), article usage (e.g., 'went to concert'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'your entry on the stage was like a hollywood movies'). Additionally, there are punctuation errors, such as spaces before commas. While you attempt some complex sentences, they often contain errors that can cause slight confusion. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms will significantly improve your accuracy.
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