Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Karan Aujla,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am wriitng this letter to express how happy i was after your concert.

You are a great performer, managing so many things like singing, playing drums and synchronising with other players at the same is a bit of a task ,but you did it amazingly well. I have always admired your drum plays, and looking upto you as an inspiration, i started learning drums since i was 15. Its been almost 7 years now and i have mastered my self not only in playing drums but also in creating and generating beats which can be used as a background music.

Its always been my dream to be a part of your music team but i know there are a few area's which need improvisation. This why i would like to join your Aujla music academy, so i can take my music journey to a higher level and be tutored by you one-on-one

I have submitted my application for the course and it would be an deeply appriciated if you select it and make me apart of your music family.

Thank you,

Angad singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly expressed your appreciation for the performance, provided relevant details about your seven-year history with drumming, and explained your goal of joining the Aujla music academy for one-on-one tutoring. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a performer, and the purpose of the communication is clear throughout. To improve, ensure that you fully develop your ideas; for instance, you could have elaborated slightly more on the specific musical techniques you hope to learn at the academy to make your request more persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your ideas easily. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'This is why' and 'not only... but also', to link your thoughts. However, the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences more fluidly. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the overall structure is coherent and easy to navigate.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'synchronising', 'inspiration', and 'tutored'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'wriitng', 'appriciated', and 'improvisation' (used incorrectly in context). Additionally, there are some minor word-choice issues, such as 'drum plays' instead of 'drumming' and 'make me apart' instead of 'make me a part'. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band score. Focusing on proofreading for spelling and common collocations will help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the conditional-like structure in your final paragraph. However, there are frequent errors in punctuation and grammar, such as the misuse of the apostrophe in 'area's', the lack of capitalization for 'I', and run-on sentences like '...is a bit of a task ,but you did it amazingly well.' The comma placement is often inconsistent. While your meaning is always clear, the frequency of these minor grammatical and mechanical errors suggests that you need to pay closer attention to basic sentence construction and punctuation rules.

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