Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
DEAR SIR,
I HOPE YOU ARE DOING WELL. LAST WEEK, I ATTENDED ONE OF YOUR CONCERT. AT THAT TIME, YOU SANG MY FAVOURITE SONG FROM THE STAGE. AFTER THAT, I BECAME A FAN OF YOUR VOICE.
CURRENTLY, I AM RUNNING A TRUST FOR DISABLED PEOPLE. WE ARE ORGANIZING A MUSIC EVENT ONCE A MONTH TO RAISE FUNDS FOR THEM. FOR THIS, WE ARE HAVING ONLY TWO SINGERS, BUT WE WANT TO ADD ONE OF THE FAMOUS SINGERS TO OUR ORGANIZATION SO WE WILL RAISE MORE MONEY AND HELP MORE PEOPLE. AFTER LISTENING TO YOU, I FEEL THAT IF YOU BECAME A PART OF OUR COMPANY, IT WILL INCREASE THE NUMBER OF AUDIENCE BECAUSE MOST PEOPLE OF THE TOWN LIKE YOUR PERFORMANCE.MOREOVER, IT WILL HELP US TO RUN TWO EVENTS IN A MONTH TO RAISE MORE FUNDS. WE ARE WILLING TO PROVIDE YOU WITH PAY AND FREE ACCOMMODATION FOR EACH EVENT IN WHICH YOU WILL GIVE YOUR PERFORMANCE.
PLEASE LET ME KNOW IF YOU NEED FURTHER INFORMATION ABOUT IT
KIND REGARDS,
HARSH
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly express your appreciation for the performance, describe your work with the charity, and explain how the singer could assist. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the transition between being a fan and asking for professional collaboration could be smoother. The ideas are relevant and sufficiently developed to meet the requirements of the task. To reach a higher band, ensure that the connection between your musical activities and the singer's specific skills is more explicitly linked to create a more persuasive argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your message. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Moreover' and 'After that', to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally a bit mechanical. For instance, the transition from the concert experience to the charity work is somewhat abrupt. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'this', 'it') is always clear would improve the overall flow. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, the body of the request, and the closing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'organizing', 'funds', and 'accommodation'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'if you became a part of our company' (a charity is usually referred to as an 'organization' or 'charity') and 'provide you with pay' (which is better expressed as 'provide remuneration' or 'offer a fee'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the variety and precision required for higher bands. Focusing on more natural collocations would enhance your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'attended one of your concert' (should be 'concerts') and 'most people of the town' (should be 'in the town'). Additionally, there are some issues with article usage and verb tense consistency. While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication, and the meaning remains clear throughout the letter. To improve, pay closer attention to pluralization and preposition usage, and try to incorporate a wider range of complex sentence forms with greater accuracy.
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