Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I have recently attended you group concert named as The Roar Tour. All the songs sung by your team were really amazing, but I particularly admired your voice as it has a different voice notes similar to mine and your performance was energetic and powerful. During the show I researched about you where I become aware of your music academy in Toronto downtown.

I have been talking part in small functions in the neighborhood where I perform as a background vocalist and musician. Since childhood I am keen towards music activities and I have learned guitar and harmonium professionally.

Lastly, I would appreciate it if you could help me to get admission in your music school where I could get an opportunity to perform with your band and learn unique techniques of stage performances.

I hope you grow more in your musical career, and consider my request as well.

Yours sincerely,

Sukhman.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly expressed your admiration for the singer's performance, provided relevant details about your background as a vocalist and musician, and explained your request for admission to his music school. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a professional. The ideas are relevant and well-developed, ensuring the reader understands your purpose immediately. To reach a higher band, you could provide slightly more specific detail about the 'unique techniques' you hope to learn, which would further demonstrate your commitment to your musical development.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your message easily. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Lastly' and 'During the show' to link your ideas. However, the transition between the second and third paragraph could be smoother. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words or phrases to connect your musical background to your desire for further training, rather than relying on simple sentence starters.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. Phrases like 'energetic and powerful' and 'background vocalist' are used accurately. There are some minor issues with word choice, such as 'talking part' instead of 'taking part' and 'different voice notes' which is slightly unnatural. While your vocabulary is adequate for the task, incorporating more precise musical terminology or more sophisticated collocations would help you achieve a higher score. Your spelling is generally accurate throughout the letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I have recently attended you group concert' (should be 'your'), 'I researched about you' (should be 'I researched you'), and 'Since childhood I am keen towards' (should be 'I have been keen on'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. Increasing your use of error-free complex sentences will help you move toward a higher band score.

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