Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Arjan,
I am writing to express my views on your concert. Interestingly, I found your show outstanding as I was enjoying like a festival over their with my friends. Furthermore, seeing you in real was the just of everyone not only me. Despite, dancing I was so into your songs lyrics which was giving real feelings.
As well as I want to share my interest in musical instruments. I am really into playing guitar since from my 10 grade as I had taken many musical classes on that time.
I would appreciate if you will provide me little knowledge about music. Like I have listened a lot of your guitar skills. I would love to take some suggestions and opinions from you as you are my role model for music.
Thank you for your precious time and I hope you will provide me best classes for music instruments.
Your Sincerely
Gurleen kaur
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly state your feelings about the concert, describe your musical background, and explain how you would like the singer to assist you. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, the request for help is quite vague; asking for 'little knowledge' or 'best classes' lacks the specific detail required for a more convincing letter. To improve, try to elaborate on your musical goals or the specific aspects of guitar playing you find challenging. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a performer, though it occasionally feels a bit informal or disjointed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' and 'As well as', although some transitions feel a bit mechanical or unnatural. The flow between sentences is sometimes interrupted by grammatical errors, which makes the progression of ideas feel slightly choppy. For instance, the transition in the second paragraph regarding your musical interest could be smoother. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences connect logically to one another to create a more cohesive narrative throughout the letter.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'musical instruments' and 'role model'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choice, such as 'seeing you in real was the just of everyone' and 'enjoying like a festival over their'. These errors indicate a limited range and some difficulty with collocations. To reach a higher band, focus on learning common word pairings and avoid translating directly from your native language, as this often leads to unnatural expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a good start. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'I am really into playing guitar since from my 10 grade', 'Despite, dancing I was so into your songs lyrics', and 'I hope you will provide me best classes'. These errors involve tense usage, prepositions, and punctuation. While these mistakes do not completely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency of your writing. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common tense errors.
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