Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Daljit,

I hope you are doing great. I am writing this about your last concert at Toronto CAA Centre, which went super hit. I attended that show with my husband and we both enjoyed a lot all the performances.

Coming to your overall performance, that was outstanding. You sung all the songs with full of energy and every single person was feeling the connectivity with you. I must say your dressing code took my heart.

There are few musical activities that I love to do in my me time which is playing piano and beating drums. I have not learn to play these instruments because learning institutions charges are very high, I am unable to afford it.

I would really appreciate it if you could help me to learn how to play piano and drums thoroughly. In addition, I will not have any objection if you can assign any other your team member who are expert in this.

I am looking forward for your prompt response.

Yours sincerely,

Parminder Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly expressed your feelings about the performance, described your musical interests, and made a specific request for help. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a performer, and the purpose of the letter is clear throughout. To improve, you could expand slightly on the 'musical activities' section to provide more depth, as the current description is quite brief. However, you have successfully fulfilled all requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'In addition' and 'Coming to your overall performance' to transition between ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea. The flow is generally smooth, and the reader can easily follow your train of thought from the concert experience to your specific request for assistance.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You use a range of vocabulary that is generally appropriate for the task, such as 'outstanding', 'connectivity', and 'prompt response'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'went super hit' (which is informal and non-standard) and 'dressing code' (instead of 'outfit' or 'stage attire'). While these do not impede communication, they limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more natural collocations and avoid overly informal phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'You sung' (should be 'You sang'), 'full of energy' (should be 'filled with energy'), and 'learning institutions charges are very high' (should be 'the charges of learning institutions are very high'). Additionally, 'I have not learn' should be 'I have not learned'. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. Increasing your control over verb tenses and subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your score.

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