Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear superstar,

Arjan dhillon.

How are you, I am glad to attend your concert yesterday. As am the craziest fan of you, I was on seventh heaven when i saw you. I did not believe on my eyes that it was you, the songs you sing touched my heart. Me and my husband did dance along with your singing. Moreover, I captured pictures and videos to make that moment remeberable . Along with this , the concert was unforgettable as you are my favourite star.

Apart from this, we enjoyed a lot, I just miss your old songs that was outstanding. No doubt you sing many songs which were great but I miss the old once. As I listened that songs in my childhood , these are childhood memory and golden era songs for me. I will be to listen that songs in next concert.

thank you.

Your fan,

Manveer kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses the first bullet point regarding feelings about the performance well. However, the response fails to address the second and third bullet points. You did not provide any details about your own musical activities, nor did you explain how you would like the singer to help you with those activities. Because two out of the three required content points are missing, the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure you explicitly cover every instruction provided in the prompt, as missing bullet points significantly impacts your score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organized into short paragraphs, but the logical flow is somewhat disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Apart from this', the transitions between ideas are sometimes abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between your childhood memories and the request for help is not established. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words to connect your sentences more smoothly and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that relates back to the prompt's requirements.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. You use some informal expressions like 'craziest fan' and 'seventh heaven', which are acceptable in a letter, but there are errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'remeberable' instead of 'memorable' and 'once' instead of 'ones'. The vocabulary is somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding your description of the songs. To improve, try to incorporate more varied adjectives and precise nouns to describe your musical experiences and feelings.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentences, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'As am the craziest fan', 'I did not believe on my eyes', and 'I will be to listen that songs'. These errors, including subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, occur throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors is noticeable. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and review the correct usage of articles and prepositions.

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