Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Smith,
I am Writing to inform regarding your performace in recent concert.
To begin with, I am so pleased to tell you that I like your voice very much and the way you are singing. I have never heard such type of melodius voice before. Additinally, I am as singer too. Thus, I have very good knowledge about the music. Even I also participated in one of the state level compitition.
Morover, In concert, you sung all famous taridional song and got so emotional while listening those. Eventhogh, at last you also sung the county song which was heart touching.
Hence, I decided to write this letter and express my interest that if you could teach me some high pitch of sound and how to manage audiance while performing on stage, it would be greately helpful!
I look forward to hearing from you. I hope you will consider my request.
Kind Regards,
Dharavi Rathod
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state your appreciation for the performance, describe your own musical background, and make a specific request for guidance. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the description of your musical activities is brief, and the request for help could be more detailed to show a clearer purpose. To improve, try to expand on your musical experience—perhaps mentioning specific genres or instruments—and provide more context for why you specifically need help with stage presence or vocal techniques. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a performer, though it could be more polished.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your message. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Additionally', 'Moreover', and 'Hence' to connect your ideas. While these are functional, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly misused, such as 'Even I also participated'. The overall progression of the letter is clear, moving from your appreciation of the concert to your own background and finally to your request. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the flow between sentences feels more natural and less like a list of points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'melodious', 'traditional', and 'heart-touching'. However, there are several spelling errors ('performace', 'Additinally', 'compitition', 'Morover', 'taridional', 'Eventhogh', 'greately') and some awkward phrasing, such as 'high pitch of sound'. These errors occasionally distract the reader, though they do not prevent the meaning from being understood. To improve, focus on proofreading your work for common spelling mistakes and try to incorporate more precise collocations, such as 'vocal range' instead of 'high pitch of sound'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and articles (e.g., 'I am Writing to inform regarding', 'I am as singer too', 'you sung all famous taridional song'). These errors are noticeable and occur throughout the text. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Practising the difference between past simple and present perfect tenses will also help you express your experiences more accurately.
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