Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I recently attended your concert in Vancouver and it was my first concert in the life. i went with my family and friends. it was amazing experience of listening you in real life because i am big fan of you. i listened your all songs. Moreover, the energy their was so positive. I also try to do some musical activities in my free time and its my dream to become a successful singer like you in the future. I spend atleast two hours from my daily routine to music but i feel lack of some confidence to present my skills infront of someone and i also have some problems with chords too. Even i am taking music class in mytown but i think i should have to change or find new music teacher to help me to get my dream come true for real. i would really appreciate if you will help me to overcome with my problems or suggest me best place for the classes. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Your faithfully,

Amandeep Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: describing your feelings about the performance, detailing your musical activities, and requesting specific help. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a singer, although the opening 'Dear sir' is a bit generic given the prompt asks you to write to a specific singer. The ideas are relevant and clearly stated, though the development of your musical activities could be more detailed to fully explore the 'how' of your request. Overall, you have fulfilled the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the concert experience to your personal musical journey and finally to your request for assistance. However, the paragraphing is missing; the entire letter is written as one block of text. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks to separate the introduction, the body of the letter, and the closing. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'I also', the flow is occasionally hindered by the lack of structural separation, making the text feel a bit rushed.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. Phrases like 'amazing experience' and 'get my dream come true' are functional, but the vocabulary is generally quite basic. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'listening you' (should be 'listening to you') and 'lack of some confidence' (should be 'lack of confidence'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise adjectives and collocations related to music and performance, rather than relying on general-purpose language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include missing articles ('in mytown'), incorrect verb forms ('I also try to do' instead of 'I also practice'), and punctuation errors (e.g., 'i' is frequently not capitalized). Additionally, there are minor errors in sentence construction, such as 'I spend atleast two hours from my daily routine to music'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall accuracy of the writing.

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