Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 7.5)
Dear Mr. Dosanjh,
I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing this letter to express my feelings after being a part of your live concert held in Scotia Bank Arena last Saturday.
I must say that your live singing performance is one of the best performances I have ever seen. Since I started living in Canada I have been to many live concerts, I never enjoyed that much. While listening to your songs I not only feel motivated by your lyrics but also feel proud of being a Punjabi.
It has been more than five years I have started learning how to sing folk music and play some music instruments such as Dhol, Harmonium and Guitar. Whenever I feel stressed, I usually play Harmonium and sing some religious songs while sitting In my house. Although I have started playing a flute, I find it hard to make different types of tunes.
I would really appreciate if I could join the music classes you provide to the students. I tried to contact your management team but did not get any response. I love the way you play a flute and I would be more than happy if you could teach me.
Thank you in advance for your time and consideration.
With regards,
Dharmveer Singh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 8.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 8.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 7.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.0 |
| Overall | 7.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 8.0
The response successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly express your admiration for the performance, provide relevant details about your musical background (playing the Dhol, Harmonium, and Guitar), and explain your request for music lessons. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a public figure. The ideas are well-developed and relevant, and the purpose of the letter is clear from the outset. You have fully satisfied the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 8.0
The letter is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, and the transition between your appreciation of the concert and your personal musical journey is smooth. You use cohesive devices such as 'Although', 'Whenever', and 'Since' effectively to link ideas. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, body, and conclusion. The overall structure is coherent and easy to follow throughout the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 7.0
You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary appropriate for the context, such as 'motivated', 'consideration', and 'management team'. There is some minor awkwardness in phrasing, such as 'being a part of your live concert' (better: 'attending your live concert') and 'make different types of tunes' (better: 'produce different melodies'). However, these do not impede communication. You use specific musical terminology correctly, which adds to the quality of the response. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your message with precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. There are a few minor grammatical slips, such as 'It has been more than five years I have started learning' (should be 'It has been more than five years since I started learning') and 'I never enjoyed that much' (should be 'I have never enjoyed a concert that much'). Despite these occasional errors, the majority of your sentences are error-free, and your control over punctuation and tense usage is generally strong. The errors do not interfere with the reader's understanding.
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