Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 7.5)
Dear Mr. Dosanjh,
I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing this letter to express my feelings after being a part of your live concert held in the Scotia Bank Arena last Saturday.
I must say that your live singing performance is one of the best performances I have ever seen. Since I started living in Canada I have been to many live concerts, I never enjoyed that much. While listening to your songs I not only feel motivated by your lyrics but also feel proud of being a Punjabi.
It has been more than five years I started learning how to sing folk music and play some music instruments such as Dhol, Harmonium and Guitar. Whenever I feel stressed, I usually play the Harmonium and sing some religious songs while sitting in my house. Although I have started playing the Flute, I find it hard to make different types of tunes.
I would really appreciate if I could join the music classes you provide to the students. I tried to contact your management team but did not get any response. I love the way you play the Flute and I would be more than happy if you could teach me.
Thank you in advance for your time and consideration.
With regards,
Dharmveer Singh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 8.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 8.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 7.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.0 |
| Overall | 7.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 8.0
The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly express your appreciation for the performance, provide relevant details about your musical background (playing the Dhol, Harmonium, and Guitar), and explain your request for guidance regarding the Flute. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a public figure. The ideas are well-developed and relevant to the task requirements, ensuring the reader understands the purpose of your communication immediately.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 8.0
The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which aids readability. You use cohesive devices such as 'Although', 'Whenever', and 'Since' to link ideas effectively. The progression of ideas is smooth, moving from the concert experience to your personal musical journey and finally to your specific request. The paragraphing is appropriate and contributes to the overall clarity of the message.
Lexical Resource — Band 7.0
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message with precision. Phrases like 'express my feelings', 'live singing performance', and 'time and consideration' are used correctly. While the vocabulary is functional and accurate, it is generally standard. To reach a higher band, you could incorporate more sophisticated collocations or idiomatic expressions related to music and personal admiration. There are no significant errors in word choice that impede communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. For example, 'Although I have started playing the Flute, I find it hard to make different types of tunes' is a well-constructed complex sentence. There are minor grammatical slips, such as 'It has been more than five years I started learning' (should be 'since I started') and 'I never enjoyed that much' (should be 'I have never enjoyed a concert that much'). However, these errors are infrequent and do not hinder the reader's understanding.
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