Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Dosanjh,

I am writing to express my gratitude and happiness of attending your recent concert at the Scotiabank Arena in Toronto on 26 July,2026.

To begin with, I was literally over the moon when I saw you for the very first time, as it was the dream comes true moment for me. I went there with my friends, and fortunately we were lucky enough to get seated in the first row.

I read a lot about your journey, the way you struggled to achieve this milestone. Being a passionate about music, I also participated at interstate level singing competitions and to build my career in this industry, I need a guidance from you.

I am fully cognizant of the fact that you do not runs any singing classes but one of my friends mentioned me that you always endure new talent. Even if you could provide me half an hour session tips, would be worth more that everything for me.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Best regards,

Vishal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

The response successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly express your feelings about the performance, describe your musical background, and make a specific request for guidance. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a performer, maintaining a respectful and enthusiastic register throughout. The ideas are well-developed, and the purpose of the letter is clear from the outset. To reach a higher band, ensure that the request for help is slightly more integrated into the narrative of your musical journey, but overall, the task requirements are fully met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which aids readability. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with' and 'Even if', which help the flow of ideas. However, the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother to improve the overall progression. The use of paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter, and the referencing is clear throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, using phrases like 'over the moon', 'milestone', and 'fully cognizant'. These choices show an attempt to use more sophisticated language. There are some minor collocation issues, such as 'mentioned me' (should be 'mentioned to me') and 'participated at' (should be 'participated in'). Despite these minor inaccuracies, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly and effectively. Expanding your use of idiomatic expressions or more precise musical terminology would further enhance this score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the dream comes true moment' (should be 'a dream-come-true moment'), 'you do not runs' (should be 'you do not run'), and 'being a passionate about music' (should be 'being passionate about music'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions, as these are the primary areas where accuracy is currently lacking.

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