Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir, Hope you are doing well, I am writing this with all my heart to tell you about how i felt in your concert . Large number of concerts took place in my university , I attended many of them , but this was for the first time i liked concert a lot . i loved your voice , your songs were on point. Tour team work with your band was outstanding. Moreover , i would like to tell you that i like music a lot . I use to play drum , i like drumbeat very much . it was my dream to be a part of musical show where i can play drumbeat . Sum up, I will be very thankful if you let me a part of your band team , it will be an honour for me to be a part of tour well known musical team . i look forward your response . Thank you . Yours sincerely, Sam

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: expressing feelings about the performance, describing musical activities, and requesting help. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For instance, the description of your musical activities is brief and lacks detail regarding your experience or skill level. The request for help is also somewhat abrupt. To improve, you should expand on your ideas by providing more specific details—such as how long you have played the drums or what specific musical styles you enjoy—to better engage the reader and fulfill the requirements of a formal letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. For example, 'Sum up' is not a standard way to begin a concluding paragraph; 'In summary' or 'To conclude' would be more appropriate. Additionally, the flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed, and the use of punctuation, particularly spacing around commas and periods, is inconsistent and distracting. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help your ideas progress more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision expected at higher levels. You rely on simple phrases like 'liked concert a lot' and 'songs were on point.' While these convey meaning, they are informal and repetitive. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'drumbeat' when referring to the instrument (the drum) and 'band team' which is redundant. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more descriptive adjectives and precise terminology related to music and performance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including missing articles ('a part of musical show'), incorrect verb tenses ('I use to play'), and issues with subject-verb agreement. Punctuation is also a significant area for improvement, as there are unnecessary spaces before punctuation marks throughout the text. While the meaning is generally clear, these frequent errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevent the writing from reaching a higher level of accuracy. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for small errors will be beneficial.

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