Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 7.0)
Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to provide you with feedback on yesterday's concert. I am an aspiring singer and I was mesmerized by your concert. I loved how you and your band were in sync.
There was no dull moment in the entire concert. Your entry on the stage and dance moves were the highlight of the show. I was surprised and loved how you paid tribute to one of the veteran signers. I would like to learn how quickly you changed your costume based on your songs with the same energy. Additionally, I liked how you played guitar along with singing one of my favorite songs.
It would be my pleasure to learn from you. I would request if you can spend some time and provide me with some tips which might be helpful for my career. I idolize you and it would mean a lot to me if you can make that happen. I look forward for your response.
Yours sincerely.
PK
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.0 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response successfully covers all bullet points required by the prompt. You state how you feel about the performance by mentioning that you were mesmerized and that there was no dull moment. You give details of your musical activities by explaining that you are an aspiring singer who plays the guitar and wants to pursue a career. Finally, you explain how you would like him to help you by asking for tips and guidance. However, the salutation 'Dear Sir' does not match the prompt instruction to write directly to the singer by name or as requested in the letter context, and the sign-off could be more aligned with the semi-formal tone. Overall, the communication purpose is clear and fully achieved.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The letter has a clear logical progression and a sensible overall arrangement. Each paragraph has a distinct focus: paragraph one introduces the feedback and general impression, paragraph two provides specific details of the show and musical interests, and paragraph three outlines the request for help. Cohesive devices such as 'Additionally' are used appropriately to link ideas. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to structure the letter. The referencing is generally clear, and the overall flow supports a smooth reading experience, meeting the criteria for a well-organised response.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary with some less common items such as 'mesmerized', 'aspiring', and 'tribute'. There is a minor spelling slip with 'signers' instead of 'singers', but this does not impede communication. Word choice and collocations are generally appropriate for a semi-formal request, such as 'provide feedback', 'dance moves', and 'career'. While there are a few basic phrases, the lexical resource is adequate to convey your message precisely and naturally in most places, fitting the criteria for a band 6.5 to 7.0 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0
The response features a good mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'I loved how you and your band were in sync' and 'I would like to learn how quickly you changed your costume based on your songs with the same energy.' There is good control over grammar and punctuation overall. While there is a slight preposition slip in 'I look forward for your response' (should be 'forward to'), the majority of sentences are error-free. The grammatical control is solid, allowing the meaning to come across clearly throughout the letter.
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