Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Darshan raval,

I hope you are doing great. I am writing this letter to express my gratitude towards your concert in dubai, which i recently attended.

It was my first time I visited your concert, and it was a huge crowded also that was a breathtaking experience to saw you with dance perfomance.

I was a big fan of you from my childhood, aprat from that, whenever i saw your concert its motivate me to go extra miles as I also have a interest in music world. In addition, I follow your foot steps to become like you.

However, after attending your concert, I thought only You can guide best throught my music journey because you have that passion, dedication and determination about music. Only following footsteps assist me to learn different things, so if you will assist me for my better carriar, that would be great.

Thank you for your continue support and assistance. I will look forward to your response.

Kind regards

vruta

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The student has successfully addressed all three bullet points of the task prompt. The letter begins by stating feelings about the performance, mentioning 'a breathtaking experience' and a concert in Dubai. Details of musical activities are included, such as having an interest in the music world and following the singer's footsteps. Finally, the student explains how they would like help, specifically asking the singer to 'guide best throught my music journey' and assist with their career. The tone is appropriately semi-formal for a letter to a celebrity, and the ideas are extended and supported adequately, placing this performance in the Band 6 or Band 7 range.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into logical paragraphs, starting with a polite opening, followed by body paragraphs detailing the concert experience and musical goals, and ending with an appropriate sign-off. Cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'However', and 'aprat from that' are used to connect ideas, although some referencing is slightly clunky or mechanical ('a big fan of you from my childhood, aprat from that, whenever i saw your concert its motivate me'). Paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately to separate distinct points, resulting in a coherent overall arrangement that meets the criteria for Band 6.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, successfully conveying meaning with phrases like 'express my gratitude', 'breathtaking experience', and 'passion, dedication and determination'. However, there are several noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'dubai' (capitalisation), 'aprat', 'carriar' (career), and awkward collocations like 'huge crowded also that was a breathtaking experience to saw you'. Despite these inaccuracies, communication is not impeded, and the range is sufficient to meet the descriptors for Band 6.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional and relative clauses ('if you will assist me for my better carriar, that would be great'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies and preposition misuse ('first time I visited', 'experience to saw', 'Interest in music world', 'throught my music journey', 'continue support'). While these errors do not impede overall communication, they prevent the text from achieving a higher band, making Band 5.5 the most appropriate score.

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