Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Dear Diljit,
Respected sir, Recently I visited your concert in the Winnipeg last month I love your voice too much I just want to telL you. Like you are so awesome and your singing also awesome we love your voice.
secondly, i would like to sahre with you i am interest in laerning the music i just want can you please hlp me for learning the musical things.
with regards,
Rajwinder kaur
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to cover all three bullet points required by the prompt. They mention how they feel about the performance by stating 'I love your voice too much' and calling the singer 'awesome'. They briefly mention their musical activities by saying 'i am interest in laerning the music', and they touch upon the final bullet point by asking 'can you please hlp me for learning the musical things'. However, the response is severely underdeveloped and falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 72 words. Because the ideas are extremely brief and lack necessary detail and extension, the response can only be awarded a band 4.0 under the Task Achievement descriptor for minimal and underdeveloped task completion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The letter lacks proper paragraphing and cohesive devices. The text is presented as a single unstructured block of sentences with repetitive phrasing such as 'I love your voice too much' and 'we love your voice'. The transition between the opening praise and the musical activities is abrupt, marked by a basic conversational connector 'secondly, i would like to sahre with you'. Punctuation is largely neglected, and capitalization is erratic, as seen in words like 'telL'. While the general meaning of the message is vaguely discernible, the lack of coherent organization and logical progression places this text firmly at band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. Words such as 'awesome', 'voice', and 'music' are reused without variety. There are several spelling mistakes, including 'telL', 'sahre', 'interest' instead of 'interested', and 'hlp' instead of 'help'. The student attempts to express appreciation and a desire to learn, but the limited range of vocabulary and frequent lexical errors mean the language is minimally adequate. This aligns with the descriptors for Band 4.0, where vocabulary is basic and errors are noticeable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple sentences joined loosely or incorrectly. There are noticeable structural errors and poor punctuation, such as 'Recently I visited your concert in the Winnipeg last month I love your voice too much I just want to telL you.' This constitutes a run-on sentence with missing prepositions and articles. Furthermore, the question structure 'can you please hlp me for learning the musical things' is awkward and inaccurate. Due to frequent grammatical errors and a lack of complex structures, a band score of 4.0 is appropriate.
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