Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear sir,

I am so gladfull for you , as few days ago, I am attend big show and many singer have attend this show and participate for different performane . My feeling is very well ,due to your performance.

I have been so exicted for this concert undoubtly,live show could make more engetic , confertableas well as happy mood.befor few days i had face stressed mood , but when listen this show after then feel relex.

well, your musical activites is so amazing .you band is next level out of our country.although,your voice and musical band combination is outstanding ,moreover, people was could dancing.

iI would like him to help you with your musical activites because i am a raper. i have lot of photographes together many singer to show live performance. well you can join me to your team i will give good responce.

your fathfully,

Amandeep,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers all three bullet points required in the prompt to some extent, but the development of ideas is limited and mechanical. You successfully state your positive feelings about the performance, mention your musical activities as a rapper who takes photographs, and express your desire to join his team. However, the tone is inconsistent, and the letter is also under-length, falling just short of the 150-word minimum at 149 words. While the bullet points are touched upon, phrases like 'My feeling is very well' and 'well you can join me to your team' lack the necessary depth and formal/semi-formal register expected of a letter to a performer. Therefore, the response aligns best with a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The letter lacks logical paragraphing and standard letter-writing conventions. The paragraphs are short, somewhat disjointed, and individual sentences do not always flow smoothly into the next. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as 'after then feel relex' and 'although,your voice and musical band combination is outstanding ,moreover'. While there is a basic chronological arrangement telling the reader about the concert and your background, the lack of effective signposting, poor punctuation, and weak paragraph structure prevent the text from achieving a higher score. Overall organisation is basic, supporting a Band 4.5 descriptor.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary usage is very basic, repetitive, and heavily constrained. You rely on simple words like 'good', 'happy', and 'show', alongside numerous spelling and word-choice errors such as 'gladfull' instead of grateful, 'exicted' for excited, 'engetic' for energetic, and 'confertableas well as' for comfortable. There are also inappropriate lexical choices like 'raper' instead of rapper and 'responce' instead of response. While the reader can generally decipher your message, the high frequency of errors and very limited vocabulary range place this response firmly in the Band 4.0 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are frequent, noticeable errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure, such as 'few days ago, I am attend big show', 'many singer have attend', and 'people was could dancing'. Simple sentence structures dominate, and attempts at more complex sentences result in severe grammatical breakdowns and confusing punctuation. The sheer density of errors heavily impedes readability and causes strain for the reader. These persistent inaccuracies are characteristic of a Band 4.0 performance.

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