Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Harry,

I am writing to inform you about the recent concert that happen in downtown last weekend was very great and it make me a huge fan of your lyrics.

First of all, I feel very comfortable by your deep voice moreover, your guittar skills are extraordinary and your attention to smaller details are very accurate. Furthermore, the body movemnet was perfect which exectly match the backgoorund music.

Also, I want to express that my musical activities matched your pace and speed. Also other factors are quiet similar and I practice a lot each day to improve it more. In the last I want to let you know that I have a small studio in my home which has all the setup which is needed by a professional singer.

Finally, I want some of your help and time to sharp my voice and skills also you can tell me your avaliblity during weekends.

I love to hearing back from you.

Best wishes,

Hamza

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response covers all three bullet points required in the prompt. You successfully say how you feel about the performance by mentioning that you are a huge fan of his lyrics and voice. You also give details of your musical activities by describing your daily practice and your home studio setup. Finally, you explain how you would like him to help by asking for assistance in sharpening your voice and skills during the weekends. Although some ideas like the studio description are a bit basic, all parts of the task are appropriately addressed, fulfilling the requirements for a Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical arrangement with an appropriate opening and closing. Paragraphing is used to separate different points, such as performance details, musical activities, and the request for help. However, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'Also' and 'Furthermore'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in the phrase 'improve it more' where the pronoun antecedent lacks precision. Overall, the organization is coherent, but the flow and use of cohesive links place this at a Band 6.0 level.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with some attempts at less common items such as 'extraordinary', 'professional', and 'availability'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'happen' instead of 'happened', 'guittar' instead of 'guitar', 'movemnet' instead of 'movement', and 'avaliblity' instead of 'availability'. While these errors do not impede overall communication, they restrict the lexical score to Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some variety. However, there are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors that affect readability. For instance, the opening sentence is a run-on and grammatically flawed: 'I am writing to inform you about the recent concert that happen in downtown last weekend was very great and it make me a huge fan...'. Subject-verb agreement issues also appear, such as 'attention... are'. While communication is maintained, the high frequency of errors keeps this within the Band 5.0 category.

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