Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear,Diljit

Hello, diljit i hop you are happy after concert. i was presant in your musical concert in wembley stediyam. your concert is wery nice and i am and my frends is so enjoy your musica. i feel about your concert is amejing and i am enjoy your every song and your difrant liting all stediyam is so much croud and i fell mantaly to much rilexing my after wark lode and mya daily ruting.

I am alweys singing your song in may hom and sawer time. me and my frends is is long time above long time foloving yor musical song in youtub and online apps.i parsanaly foloving your musical instument and your time is good dedicaton wark your on evant concert you and your tim wark is so nice.

i would like to explain to what you inpruv the your musical activities is inpruve and again you more peples is enjoy not your song every one is enjoy the your musical instmant and your tema wark they are meneje your musica sisttam. i am so happy after your musical concert.

Thank you,

pradip

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the main parts of the task, though some areas remain limited and under-developed. You successfully state how you feel about the performance by mentioning that the concert at Wembley Stadium was amazing and helped relieve your work stress, as seen when you wrote, "i feel about your concert is amejing and i am enjoy your every song". However, your details regarding your musical activities and how you would like the singer to help you are quite unclear and tangled together. For instance, your explanation of your musical activities and what you want him to improve lacks clear development and focus, making it difficult for the reader to fully grasp your specific requests. To improve, ensure that every bullet point from the prompt is clearly separated, fully expanded, and directly addressed with specific, well-supported details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation evident in the letter, but it lacks a clear overall progression. The response is divided into paragraphs, but the ideas within them jump abruptly from your feelings about the concert to your home listening habits, and then into vague suggestions for the singer's team. Cohesive devices are very limited, inaccurate, or repetitive, relying heavily on basic linkers and repetitive phrasing like "i am" and "and my frends". Reference words are also occasionally confusing, as seen when pronoun shifts make it hard to follow who is performing or managing the system. To move up, you need to use a wider range of cohesive devices naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a singular, clearly developed focus that links logically to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, showing a limited range that struggles to express precise meaning. There are noticeable errors in spelling, word choice, and word formation throughout the text, such as "presant", "stediyam", "amejing", "difrant", "mantly", and "rilexing". These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and impede smooth communication. You also rely on simple everyday words and make frequent mistakes when attempting less common vocabulary or collocation, such as "wark lode" and "sisttam". To achieve a higher score, you need to expand your vocabulary range, learn the correct spelling of common and semi-formal terms, and use precise phrasing suited for letter-writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical structures used are very limited in range, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex sentences that are heavily flawed. Errors are frequent and often distort the meaning or cause difficulty for the reader. There are persistent problems with verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles, such as in the phrases "i hop you are happy after concert", "my frends is so enjoy", and "i parsanaly foloving". Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also weak, with run-on sentences joined poorly by conjunctions rather than proper subordination or full stops. To improve, you need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb forms, and reducing the frequency of basic grammatical errors.

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