Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Dilijit Dosanjh,

I'm writing this letter to express my feeling about your last night concert that happened in Toronto. I just wanted to tell, you'r one of my idol in music industry. Since'my childhood, I love to listen your music weather it's folk, religious and punjabi. I was also a music student during my college time. I couldn't believe that I attended your concert in Canada.

Your performance was top- notch and everyone was enjoying that made me to do dance at the moment.

Despite this, I would like to draw your attention to my music skills such as playing harmoniam one of my favorite activity that i do in leisure time. In addition, It would mean the world to me if you can help my in learning some of folk instruments to keep my self in touch with my tradition roots.

In the end, i will look forward to your swift response.

Your Faithfully,

Manpreet Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You successfully covered all parts of the prompt, satisfying the core requirements of a general correspondence task. You clearly stated your feelings about the concert by calling the performance 'top-notch' and explaining how it made you want to dance. You also provided details of your musical background, mentioning that you were a music student during your college time and enjoy playing the harmonium. Finally, you explained how you would like the singer's help in learning folk instruments. To reach a higher level, these ideas could have been more fully and deeply extended, as some points, such as your musical activities and the requested assistance, remain somewhat brief and could benefit from further elaboration and supporting detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

Your letter maintains a coherent overall arrangement and follows an appropriate layout for personal correspondence, beginning with a proper salutation and concluding with a sign-off. You successfully divided your thoughts into logical paragraphs that separate your praise for the performance from your personal musical background and your request for help. However, the progression of ideas is occasionally mechanical. Your use of cohesive devices is sometimes basic, and phrases like 'Despite this' are not entirely appropriate for the context of connecting your enjoyment of the concert to your own musical skills. Smoother transitions and more precise referencing would make the logical flow of the letter much more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You demonstrated an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating less common words and phrases such as 'top-notch', 'leisure time', and 'tradition roots'. However, your vocabulary control shows noticeable limitations. There are several word choice and spelling errors, such as writing 'concert that happened' instead of 'concert that took place', 'weather' instead of 'whether', and 'harmoniam' instead of 'harmonium'. Additionally, phrases like 'one of my idol' lack proper plural agreement. While these inaccuracies do not completely impede communication, they restrict the lexical score because they reveal a lack of precision and occasional lapses in word formation and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your writing displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating an attempt to handle varied structures such as relative clauses and conditional-style requests. However, your control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent, with frequent minor errors present throughout the text. Examples include missing articles, such as 'last night concert' instead of 'last night's concert', punctuation errors like the comma splice in 'I just wanted to tell, you'r', and tense or agreement issues such as 'I love to listen your music' instead of 'I love listening to your music'. Although these errors rarely impede communication entirely, they are frequent enough to prevent the grammar score from reaching a higher band.

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