Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Mr. David,

My purpose of writing is regarding my admiration for your performance at a concert I attended last weekend on Sunday, 4th, October. Sincerely, I had a great time watching you perform live. I was a not having much fun, but when you stepped up the stage, I became happy.

I enjoy listening to Jazz and sometimes raggae music. That is one of the reason I really liked how you strung the guitar during your performance. Personally, I also play the guitar a bit, but not as impressive as you. The song 'Magic Night' from your album 'ecstasy' was my favourite highlight of the day. It is a wonderful jazz music.

If you do not mind, can you kindly send me some of your music collection to my address '20 Mano Close, Oxford Street' or email the digital copy to '[redacted email]' I would like to listen to your songs all day.

I would be expecting a feedback. Thanks in advance for granting my request.

Warm regards,

Roland Odigie

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You clearly express admiration for the singer and include relevant details, such as enjoying jazz, playing guitar, and liking “Magic Night.” However, the request for help with your musical activities is not really addressed: asking for music to listen to does not explain how the singer could support your guitar playing or other musical pursuits. The performance reaction is also somewhat unclear in “I was a not having much fun,” and the letter gives limited detail about your own activities. To strengthen the response, describe what you are learning or doing musically and make a specific, relevant request—for example, advice, a lesson, or guidance on improving your guitar technique. This would ensure all parts of the task are fully covered.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: you begin with your reaction to the concert, move to your musical interests, and finish with a request and sign-off. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these topics, and phrases such as “Personally” and “If you do not mind” signal shifts appropriately. Some connections are less clear or feel mechanical, however. “That is one of the reason” does not clearly link your music preferences to your admiration for the guitar playing, and the transition from describing your own guitar playing to requesting a music collection does not establish how the request relates to your activities. Use clearer links between ideas and organise the final paragraph around a specific form of help you want.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for a personal letter, including “admiration,” “perform live,” “Jazz,” and “digital copy,” and the reader can understand your main message. There are noticeable problems with word choice, spelling, and collocation, though. “Strung the guitar” is not the natural expression for playing it, “raggae” is misspelled, and “a wonderful jazz music” is an awkward phrase. “My favourite highlight” is also repetitive in meaning. Aim for more natural music-related expressions and check spelling and countability. For example, you could say that the singer “played the guitar beautifully,” describe the song as “a wonderful piece of jazz,” and call it “the highlight of the concert.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, including “If you do not mind, can you kindly send me…” and the contrast introduced by “but.” The message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors are evident. “I was a not having much fun” has an incorrect verb construction; “I was not having much fun” would be correct. There are also errors in agreement and articles in “one of the reason” and “a wonderful jazz music.” The sentence beginning “If you do not mind” would be more natural as a polite indirect request: “If you do not mind, could you send me…?” Review verb forms, plural nouns after “one of the,” and article use while continuing to practise varied sentence structures.

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