Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Mr. Bhullar,

Last weekneed , i enjoyed your concert in Vancouver downtown with my husband and i lisend your songs from last five years and i love your voice but in concert in seen you first time in realty and it was my one dream to see you in real. You performance was so good and all the arrangements was well done because everyone can see your performance properly .

I also love singing and i wants to release me first song in next month. i write this song by my self and this was hard for me because i donot have good knowledge about music but i will give my best in this one.

But i need your help and some suggestions about some things because this field is totaly new for me. you have experiance on more then ten years in this field. can you please help need in my this journey. i will wait for your reply.

From

Mehakpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points in the task: you praise the concert, describe your own singing and plan to release a song, and ask the singer for help. Details such as having followed his songs for five years and writing your first song make the letter personal and relevant. The request for assistance is clear, but the kind of help you want remains general: “some suggestions about some things” does not explain whether you need advice on recording, songwriting, or performing. The musical activities are also only briefly described. To develop the response further, specify what guidance you hope to receive and add a little more detail about your singing or song.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a sensible overall order: you begin with your reaction to the concert, move to your own musical plans, and finish by asking for help. Paragraph breaks support this progression, and linking words such as “because” and “but” show relationships between ideas. However, some sentences contain several points joined together, making the progression less smooth—for example, the opening combines your visit, listening history, admiration, and first time seeing him. References such as “this one” and “this journey” are not fully specific, and the closing is abrupt. Separate the opening ideas into shorter sentences and use clearer references to make the letter easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main message, including relevant terms such as “concert,” “singing,” “release,” “song,” and “suggestions.” The personal tone is appropriate, and phrases such as “your performance was so good” clearly express your admiration. However, the range is limited and some wording is imprecise or repetitive, particularly “some suggestions about some things” and “help me in my this journey.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “lisend,” “experiance,” and “totaly,” which reduce the accuracy and polish of the letter. Build a wider set of precise music-related expressions and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the reader can generally understand the intended meaning. For example, you explain that writing the song was difficult because you lack musical knowledge, and you use “because” to connect the reason to the result. However, there are some errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction: “I wants to release,” “all the arrangements was,” and “I donot have” need correction. The opening also runs several ideas together without clear sentence boundaries, while punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent. Practise checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms, and divide long sentences into complete, clearly punctuated units.

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