Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear sir,

I wish you aee well. I regardly intorm you i am avery big fan.on your song.I wsa seen your show in my college .this was first day of my college.I heard my faverite song this time you are singing.I was very plesed this time.

I have a little band group.I have some musical inustrument also.

I fellow you every time.you are my idol .I think i begin my singing life enspaired you.

I alawyes follow your activities.

Think you for your time and consideraytion.

Your sincerly

Sharmin sultana

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You communicate admiration for the singer and mention that you have a small band and some instruments, so the letter is relevant to the situation. However, the task is addressed only minimally: you do not explain what musical activities your band undertakes, and you never say how you would like the singer to help you. The opening and closing are present, but the message is too brief to develop its purpose. The response also contains 90 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 150. To improve, describe your band’s music and performances, then make a specific request, such as asking for advice, a meeting, or feedback on a recording.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The ideas follow a basic sequence: you introduce your reaction to the concert, mention your band, and finish with thanks. This gives the reader a simple overall path through the letter. However, the connections between points are limited, and several short statements feel disconnected, such as “I have a little band group” followed by “I have some musical instrument also.” The repeated references to following the singer do not advance the message. Use paragraphs to separate your concert experience, musical activities, and request for help, and connect related details with clear linking phrases. This would make the letter easier to follow and give it a more purposeful progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words, including “performance” through your description of the show, “band,” “musical instrument,” and “idol,” which makes the general topic understandable. However, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice problems make parts difficult to interpret, for example “regardly intorm,” “faverite,” and “ensp aired.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “I have a little band group.” Build a wider range for describing music and your activities—for example, “live performance,” “rehearse,” and “perform at college events”—and check spelling and common word combinations carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you express your admiration and request clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Most of the response consists of short, simple statements, and the reader can identify the main ideas. There is little variety in sentence structure, however, and errors in verb forms, articles, and sentence construction are frequent. For example, “I was seen your show” does not form a correct past-tense sentence, while “I regardly intorm you i am avery big fan” lacks a clear grammatical structure and appropriate punctuation. “I have some musical instrument also” also needs a plural form and a more natural sentence pattern. Practise accurate past-tense sentences to describe the concert and use complete sentences to explain your band and request. Careful punctuation and capitalisation will also improve readability.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.