Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 4.5)
DEAR SIR,
My name is rakhesh and i am biggest fan of yours i want to share my experience about concert that i attend last week with my close friends.
The concert i so amazing and the access control is amazing although there is many security gaurd that secure the enterance but my seat is already equiped by someone than i complaint to a security manager and they do not solve my issue. I am also a singer but due to poor support i did not achieve my destination since i want to share my some lyrics to you i hope will surely like it.
I kindly request you to response me back and thankyou to look at my message
Your sincerally,
Rakhs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
You make a relevant attempt to describe the concert and mention that you are a singer, so the reader can identify the general purpose of the letter. However, the task is only minimally addressed: you do not clearly say what you admired about the singer’s performance, give meaningful details about your own musical activities, or specify how he could help you. The request to “share my some lyrics” hints at a possible form of help, but it needs to be explained. The response is also 27 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to develop the three points. Add specific praise, describe your singing or other musical work, and make a clear, polite request.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The letter has a recognisable opening, a main paragraph, and a closing, and the ideas broadly move from the concert to your own singing and then to a request. This gives it some basic organisation. However, the main paragraph combines unrelated details about security and your musical ambitions, so the progression is difficult to follow. The link between the seat problem and your wish to share lyrics is unclear, and the final request does not explain what response or assistance you want. Use separate paragraphs for your concert reaction, musical activities, and request, and connect each idea explicitly. This would make the message easier to follow without relying on abrupt transitions.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “concert,” “singer,” “security manager,” and “lyrics,” which helps communicate the general context. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “access control” and “achieve my destination,” but these are not natural choices for the intended meaning and make parts of the message unclear. Spelling and word-form errors, including “gaurd,” “enterance,” and “equiped,” are noticeable. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and a suitable polite tone: for example, describe what you enjoyed about the performance and ask for advice or feedback on your singing. A broader range of precise music-related vocabulary would make the letter more effective.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response includes both short statements and longer sentences, with an attempt to connect ideas using “although” and “since.” However, the longer structures are often difficult to control, as in “although there is many security gaurd” and “since i want to share my some lyrics to you i hope will surely like it.” There are recurring problems with verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries; for instance, “the concert i so amazing” does not form a complete, accurate clause, and the final request needs clearer sentence structure. Use simpler, complete sentences first, then add a few accurately formed complex sentences. Check that each clause has a subject and verb and that punctuation separates complete ideas.
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