Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Asim,
I really wants to come in your concert as there are many singers but I was really willing to see you and hear your song .I really appericiated your voice and way you sing when i hear your songs I feel pleasure and forget all my worries
last night , i was there at your concert and it was amazing the whole crowd is singing with you and everybody including me really enjoy your songs
i also have interest in music like during leisure time i meep myself busy and sing songs and play guitar as well and while cooking or doimg something i memerizing some song of you
also i have a good voice so i will help you in your musical activities like give me some small task during concert when you tired of singing so i will be more thank full to you I have a dream of work with you
Yours truly
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You address all three points: you praise the singer’s voice and concert, describe singing and playing guitar, and ask to take part in his concerts. Details such as “the whole crowd is singing with you” make your reaction personal and relevant. However, the request for help is not fully clear: “give me some small task during concert when you tired of singing” could mean you want to perform, but the singer’s role in helping you develop your musical activities is not explained. Your musical activities are also listed briefly rather than developed. Make the request more specific—for example, ask for advice, a rehearsal opportunity, or feedback on your singing—and explain how this would help you.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The ideas follow a broadly sensible order: you begin with your reaction to the concert, move to your own musical interests, and finish with a request. This gives the letter a recognisable overall structure. However, the response is presented as one long block, and several ideas run together without clear sentence boundaries. The repeated use of “and” also makes the progression feel list-like, particularly in the description of singing, guitar playing, and memorising songs. Use separate paragraphs for your reaction, musical activities, and request, and connect ideas with clearer transitions such as “In my free time” and “I would be grateful if.”
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “concert,” “crowd,” “guitar,” and “musical activities,” so the reader can understand the main subject. There are also attempts to express enthusiasm, such as “forget all my worries” and “I have a dream of work with you.” However, the range is limited and some word choices or phrases are inaccurate or unclear, including “I really wants to come in your concert,” “I meep myself busy,” and “small task.” Spelling errors such as “appericiated” and “memerizing” are noticeable. Build a more precise range for describing performance and requests, and check spelling and natural combinations of words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The letter communicates its main ideas, but grammatical control is weak and errors occur frequently. Most sentences rely on simple clauses joined together, while attempts to form longer sentences often become difficult to follow. For example, “I really wants to come in your concert” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, and “everybody including me really enjoy your songs” does not use the correct verb form. Tense and sentence-boundary problems also appear in “when you tired of singing,” while missing punctuation makes several clauses run together. Practise accurate present and past forms, agreement, and complete sentence construction before adding more complex structures.
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