Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Satinder Sartaj,

I would like to write you a letter about the concert attended by me on last Sunday at Conventional Center in Winnipeg. I went their because you are one of my favourit singer.

Firstly, my joyed had no bound after seeing you. It was my first time when I attended your concert as I had watched many reels on instagram then I decided to book your concert night.Secondly, I most liked the cultural folk song with different rythems. Not only this, the song that sung you by closing the hall lights, I really liked it that ultimately helped to broke the daily monotony.

I would also liked to mentioned that I am persuing my master degree in music. I did many live showes on varied locations like wedding, ring ceremony etc. But, still i want to enhence my music skill and want to become competent in this music

industry.

I would request you, provide me the training for live show and the skill of folk song on different tunes and rythems. I expected my degree will done on this December ,after i want to get training from you if you give me the chance.

I am waiting for your reply. Thank you for your time and consideration.

your faithfully

name.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points in the task: you describe enjoying the singer’s performance, explain that you are studying music and have performed at events, and ask for training in live performance and folk music. The specific reference to the song performed with the hall lights off makes your praise more personal. Your request is understandable, but the details of the help you want and how it would support your development could be explained more fully. The letter also gives a clear reason for writing, though the opening could state your appreciation more directly. To strengthen the response, develop the performance details and make the proposed training arrangement more precise, while keeping the focus on your musical goals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a coherent overall structure: it opens with the concert, moves to your musical background, then makes a request and closes politely. Paragraphing helps the reader distinguish these stages, and connectors such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “But” show how ideas relate. However, the sequence markers sometimes feel mechanical, and the first paragraph combines several points in a way that makes the progression less smooth. Some references are also unclear, particularly “the song that sung you,” which interrupts the connection between ideas. Use fewer formulaic transitions and link each paragraph’s details more naturally—for example, connect your enjoyment of the folk songs directly to your request for instruction in that style.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “cultural folk song,” “live shows,” “training,” and “music industry,” and you attempt some less common expressions such as “daily monotony.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main message, but inaccurate word forms, spelling, and collocations are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause. Examples include “my joyed had no bound,” “favourit,” “rythems,” and “enhence my music skill.” Aim for natural combinations and check spelling carefully; for instance, say “I was overjoyed” and “improve my musical skills.” More precise vocabulary for the performance and the training you seek would also make the letter sound more fluent and personal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including the contrast in “Not only this…” and the conditional idea “if you give me the chance.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in verb forms, sentence construction, articles, and punctuation occur often enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “I would also liked to mentioned” needs corrected verb forms, while “the song that sung you” has an unclear clause structure. “I expected my degree will done” also needs a clearer tense and passive construction. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea at a time, then check subject–verb patterns and verb forms before adding clauses.

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