Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Daljit,

I am writing you to tell you about your last saturday performance of singing at Cactus club.

Your songs were so good and i felt very happy to watching your live singing show. I was over the moon.

I have very keen interes in singing and have of the instrument such as guitar, piano and so on. I can sing and i do practice every day with tehse musicial instruments.

There are some musical activities that i do not haev any knowledge and if you can help me with this, It would be really appericiate. Because i want to become a singer and ypur help will enhance ,y knowledge readarding other things in music instrument which i do not know.

I hope this email finds you well and i will waiting for your response.

Thnakyou in advance for your help,

kind regards,

Jeenat

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three bullet points: you praise the performance, mention your singing and instruments, and ask for help. The positive reaction is clear in “I was over the moon,” and your goal of becoming a singer gives the request some context. However, the musical activities and the specific help you want are only briefly described; “some musical activities” and “other things in music” do not tell Daljit what guidance you need. The letter is also 145 words, so it does not meet the required minimum of 150. Add a few relevant details, such as what you practise or whether you want advice on technique, songwriting, or performing, to develop the purpose more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: you begin with the reason for writing, then discuss your musical interests, make a request, and close politely. Paragraph breaks help the reader follow these stages, and phrases such as “Because I want to become a singer” connect your request to your ambition. This coherent organisation is a strength. To make the progression more polished, link ideas within paragraphs more smoothly and avoid beginning a sentence with “Because” when it depends on the previous sentence. The request paragraph could also move from your current activities to a specific area where you need help, making the relationship between ideas clearer and less repetitive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some expressive language suited to a personal letter, including “over the moon” and “live singing show,” and the reader can understand your main message. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, such as “interes,” “musicial,” “appericiate,” and “Thnakyou.” Some phrases are also unnatural or vague: “have of the instrument” and “other things in music instrument” do not express your meaning clearly. Choose more precise vocabulary for your musical interests and the support you want, and check spelling carefully. For example, you could name particular skills such as vocal technique or stage performance rather than referring generally to “other things.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate using several simple sentences and attempt longer structures, for example, “if you can help me with this, It would be really appericiate.” However, the longer attempts are often faulty, and errors in verb forms and sentence construction sometimes make the message difficult to read. Examples include “I felt very happy to watching” and “I will waiting for your response”; these need forms such as “happy to watch” and “I will be waiting.” The opening also needs a more accurate pattern: “I am writing to tell you about your performance.” Practise combining accurate simple sentences with controlled conditional sentences, and check capitalisation and punctuation, including the unnecessary capital in “It.”

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