Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Karan Aujla, I am feeling very happy to write this letter to you about your recent concert which were recently organised in the city where I live Toronto, Canada which was totally sold out show, it was my first time experiencing the live performance of my favourite artist, since you entered on the stage and started your performance to till end it was amazing, the vibes were so high, I enjoyed each and every song of yours over there moreover, each and every person there vibing on your performance, I was so happy that I got this oppertunity to attand this concert of yours, nevertheless, you are my role model as well and I also started writing songs and singing like you and here I am attaching a link of my first official song I just want that help me to promote my song on your official instagram and other social handles to post it online. I am looking forward of your positive response regarding my song.

Thankyou

Adarsh Mishra

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you describe enjoying the concert, explain that you have started writing and singing songs, and ask the singer to promote your first song on his social media. The enthusiasm is clear in details such as “the vibes were so high” and calling him your role model. This fully covers the task, while the request is specific. However, your musical activities are only briefly described, and the letter gives little detail about the song or what kind of support you hope for beyond posting it. The response therefore has relevant content throughout, but some ideas are less developed than others. Adding a little more about your music and why his support would help would make the message more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The reader can follow the broad sequence from your reaction to the concert, to your own music, and then to your request. However, nearly the entire letter is written as one long sentence, with ideas joined by commas and connectors such as “moreover” and “nevertheless.” This makes the progression difficult to see and causes some connections to feel mechanical or unclear. For example, the shift from describing the audience to explaining your songwriting would be clearer in a new paragraph. Use separate sentences and paragraphs for the concert, your musical activities, and your request; choose linking words only where they express a clear relationship. A conventional closing would also help the letter feel complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary that conveys enthusiasm and fits the informal context, including “role model,” “live performance,” and “promote my song.” The reader can understand your main message, but several choices and spellings are inaccurate or awkward, such as “oppertunity,” “attand,” and “vibing on your performance.” Phrases like “I am feeling very happy to write this letter” and “looking forward of your positive response” are also not natural in this context. Aim for more precise, idiomatic expressions—for example, say that you were delighted to attend and that the audience responded enthusiastically. Checking spelling and common word combinations would improve clarity and make your tone more polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect several ideas and use some complex structures, but the letter relies heavily on one extended sentence, and errors in sentence formation and grammar sometimes make the message harder to follow. For example, “your recent concert which were recently organised” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “since you entered on the stage and started your performance to till end” has an unclear and faulty time construction. The request beginning “I just want that help me” also needs a clearer grammatical pattern, such as “I would be grateful if you could help me.” Use full stops to separate complete ideas, and practise accurate past-tense descriptions and conditional forms for polite requests. This will give your writing more control and variety.

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