Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Jhon,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to express my sincere gratitude for came to my town for lovely music concert. I really happy to join you concert and enjoy a lot that day. That music event is one of the best event in my life.

In additional, I also play some music instrument that day on your concert, that was one of my most importanat dream which I fulfill in your concert. I am big fan of your music. Everyday when I did exercise I played your music in my phone and also I drive I listen your music which is sing by yourself.

I realy enjoy when I listen your music in gym after that I feel more energatic and motivate for doing some exercise. Few of your songs are inspired me to do something new in my life.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours faithfully,

Kajal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The letter conveys enthusiasm for the singer, especially in saying the music motivates you during exercise, and it mentions playing an instrument at the concert. However, the task is only minimally addressed because two key points are missing or unclear: you do not describe your regular musical activities, and you never explain what help you want from the singer. The sentence about playing an instrument “that day on your concert” is difficult to interpret and does not establish what you currently do musically. To make the purpose clear, describe your instrument, practice or performances, then make a specific request—for example, advice, a lesson, or feedback on your playing. A clearer account of the performance itself would also strengthen the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic letter structure, with a greeting, several paragraphs, and a closing, and the ideas are generally grouped around the concert and the singer’s music. However, there is no clear progression towards the requested purpose: the paragraphs repeat admiration and the effect of the songs, while the request for help is absent. Linking phrases such as “In additional” and “after that” do not always show the relationship between ideas accurately, and the final thanks and sign-off arrive without a clear request or concluding purpose. Organise the letter in task order: describe the performance, explain your own musical activities, and then state how the singer could help.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small range of relevant vocabulary, including “concert,” “instrument,” “fan,” and “inspired,” which makes the general topic understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive, particularly the repeated references to “your music,” and several word choices or forms are inaccurate enough to make parts less clear, such as “lovely music concert,” “importanat dream,” and “more energatic.” Some expressions also sound unnatural, including “I am big fan” and “music which is sing by yourself.” Choose more precise phrases for the performance and your musical interests, and check spelling and common collocations. For instance, you could describe the performance as “captivating” and say that you “play the guitar in a local group.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The letter relies mainly on short, simple statements, with a few attempts to connect ideas using clauses such as “when I did exercise” and “which is sing by yourself.” These attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “I am writing … for came,” “I really happy,” “I also play some music instrument,” and “Few of your songs are inspired me.” Practise complete sentence patterns and consistent verb forms: for example, “I am writing to thank you for coming,” and “A few of your songs have inspired me.” More accurate sentences and a wider range of controlled structures would improve clarity.

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