Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Karan,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my feelings how I felt at your concert show. You are one of my favourite singer since my childhood. I always supported you on social media whenever people started trolled you. I feel so good on your performance which held in the concert show in rogers arena. Your voice is like a heaven. Whenever I heard your songs. I was always over the moon. Your music makes me feel relaxed during my tough time. I always get some hint from your songs to face the challeneges. It makes me feel like it is a piece of a cake for me. That much energy gives your music. I just want to request you don't change your mindset. Nowadays, these kind of music people like the most so go ahead and makes our country proud.

Best wishes,

Raman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You clearly express admiration for the singer, describing his voice as “like a heaven” and explaining that his music relaxes and encourages you. However, the task asks for details of your own musical activities and how you would like him to help with them; neither point is addressed. The letter therefore covers only the performance and your feelings, leaving two key parts of the task unanswered. The response is also one word below the required minimum. To improve, add specific information about an activity such as singing, playing an instrument, or performing, then make a clear request—for example, asking for advice, a lesson, or feedback on your work. This would make the letter complete and more developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The ideas are mostly presented in a sensible order: you introduce your purpose, describe your admiration, and explain how the music affects you before closing with good wishes. This gives the reader a basic sense of progression. However, the letter is one continuous paragraph, and several short statements feel disconnected, such as “Whenever I heard your songs. I was always over the moon.” The repeated references to your feelings could also be grouped more effectively. Use separate paragraphs for your reaction to the concert, your own musical activities, and your request for help. Linking related ideas with clear transitions would make the letter easier to follow and give it a more complete structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of expressive phrases to communicate enthusiasm, including “over the moon,” “a piece of a cake,” and “makes me feel relaxed.” These choices show an effort to use idiomatic language rather than relying only on basic vocabulary. However, some expressions are inaccurate or unnatural in context, such as “your concert show,” “your voice is like a heaven,” and “some hint from your songs.” There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “chall eneges” (written as “challeneges”) and “trolled.” Aim for natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise language would help you express your admiration and musical interests clearly without relying on several idioms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple sentences and longer structures, for example, “Your music makes me feel relaxed during my tough time” and “I always get some hint from your songs to face the challeneges.” The main message is generally understandable, but errors occur frequently enough to affect fluency. “I am writing to express my feelings how I felt” needs a grammatical link, while “Whenever I heard your songs.” is an incomplete sentence. There are also problems with agreement and verb forms in “one of my favourite singer” and “go ahead and makes our country proud.” Practise complete clauses, consistent tense, and subject–verb agreement, then proofread each sentence for a clear grammatical structure.

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