Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Himesh,

My name is Sombir, I attended to Rock and Roll concert in Las Vegas last month. There were many singers but out of everyone I like you the most. Your voice is so melodious which makes me connect to each word you was singing. I can remember my past days of school life when you sung the song Old School. I also wanted to become a singer and when i listen to your songs it gives me motivation to achieve my dream. I know you did a lot of hard to became that great but I want to let you know that all those challenges you faced worth it. It was a unique experience and I will never forget that concert. I hope would get a chance to meet you in-person. I am big fan of you. Even every time I am feeling low, I listen to your music which boost my energy and motivation. Thank you for being there for us and please keep releasing your new songs frequently.

Thanking you

Yours faithfully

Sombir

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You clearly express admiration for the singer, describing his voice as “so melodious” and explaining how his songs motivate you. However, the response does not address two important parts of the task: you give no details about your own musical activities, and you do not explain what specific help you would like from him. Hoping to meet him is not enough to show how he could support your musical development. The letter therefore responds only partially, despite its relevant and enthusiastic comments about the concert. To strengthen it, describe what you do musically—for example, singing in a group or practising an instrument—and make a clear request, such as asking for advice or a short lesson.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The ideas are generally understandable and follow a loose sequence: you introduce yourself, describe the performance, explain its personal impact, and close with thanks. The greeting and sign-off also make the letter format clear. However, the main body is presented as one long paragraph, and there is no clear progression through all three requested points. Several ideas about admiration and motivation repeat one another, while the missing details about your musical activities and request leave the letter’s purpose incomplete. Use separate paragraphs for your reaction to the concert, your own musical experience, and the help you are seeking. This would create clearer organisation and make the connections between ideas less repetitive.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary to communicate enthusiasm, including “melodious,” “motivation,” “unique experience,” and “challenges.” These choices help convey a personal response rather than relying entirely on basic words. Some expressions, however, are imprecise or unnatural, such as “connect to each word,” “I am big fan of you,” and “keep releasing your new songs frequently.” These do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, but they limit the naturalness and precision of the letter. Aim for more idiomatic collocations and vocabulary suited to a respectful fan letter, such as describing how the lyrics resonate with you or asking for guidance with your singing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the overall meaning remains clear. Some grammatical errors occur, particularly with verb forms and sentence construction. For example, “I attended to Rock and Roll concert” has an incorrect preposition and is missing an article, while “you was singing” and “you sung” use incorrect verb forms in context. The sentence “I hope would get a chance” also lacks a subject, and “all those challenges you faced worth it” is missing a verb. These errors show that complex ideas are not yet consistently controlled. Review past-tense forms, subject–verb agreement, and complete clause structure, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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