Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Arijit Sir,
Firstly , let me introduce my self,My name is Rupali Tirthnkar. I Studie In BVM Engineering . I just Want to Ecpress My Feeling about yesterday night when U come in Our Collage BVM For concert night it's was just very Enjoyble night ever.
In addition, you're music team is gave mind blowing performance with you're lyrisc and moment , feeling and exicetment for song is amazing. even i feel like we all are sing with you and your team me and my friends are extremly enjoed your concert like we all capturing all moment with you for a life. also we are making some videos and reel with you're song .in your concert is collabrating all teast of music like giving some dance vibe, feel emotionally,also the main part is retro music in 90's Music is just 'WOW' I really enjoyed Your Concert.
In the and I just want to attende you're concert again so please come in next year in our collage again and give us more memories for you're album song we're waiting you're concert for next year .and Thank you so much for making best memories for our collage life.
Your Fam.
Rupali
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
You clearly express enthusiasm for the singer’s performance, describing it as “mind blowing” and saying you and your friends enjoyed the concert. You also mention making videos and reels, which gives some detail about your musical activities. However, the task’s third point is not adequately addressed: asking the singer to return for another concert is not the same as explaining how he could help with your own musical activities. Your letter also gives little information about what you do musically, beyond recording content. As a result, the response only minimally fulfils the full purpose of the task. Explain your activities more specifically and make a direct, practical request, such as asking for advice, a workshop, or feedback on your singing or playing.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The letter has a recognisable opening, several body paragraphs, and a closing, and the ideas generally relate to the concert. Connectors such as “Firstly,” “In addition,” and “In the end” help signal movement between points. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the second paragraph combines praise, videos, musical styles, and emotional reactions, while the final paragraph shifts between requesting another concert and referring to an album. Some linking phrases are awkward or repetitive, and references such as “your team” and “we all” can make it unclear who is doing what. Group the performance comments together, then describe your own musical activities and make your request in a separate, focused paragraph.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some expressive language to convey excitement, including “mind blowing performance,” “retro music,” and “making best memories.” These choices show an attempt to communicate personal enthusiasm, but the vocabulary is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “lyrisc,” “exicetment,” and “collabrating all teast of music.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “capturing all moment with you for a life” and “give us more memories for your album song.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary for your own musical activities—such as rehearsing, performing, or learning an instrument—would also help you explain the task more clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example when describing how you and your friends responded to the concert. However, these sentences are often difficult to follow because of frequent problems with sentence boundaries, verb forms, agreement, and articles. Examples include “it's was just very Enjoyble night” and “you're music team is gave mind blowing performance.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, with several ideas joined together without clear sentence breaks. These errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning, so the range of structures remains limited in practice. Build accuracy with short, complete sentences first, then add one clear subordinate clause at a time; check subject–verb agreement and use apostrophes correctly for “your” and “you’re.”
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