Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter
- say how you feel about his performance
- give details of your musical activities
- explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Dear Diljit,
I attended your recent concert and i want to share my thoughts about it so first of all it was very amazing i had a great time at your concert i enjoyed your all songs and one of my most loved song is 'love me like you do' and it melts my heart and if i ever get a chance again to attend your concert i would sure come and enjoy my time with you and your performance like they way you sing and move around, doing some amazing steps on stage it was melting my heart and i was going threw a tough time and i don't regret to attent your concert and thanks for this lovely concert. have a great life ahead.
Your die hard fan.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
You clearly express admiration for the singer, describing the concert as “very amazing” and saying the performance lifted your spirits during a tough time. However, the letter addresses only the first bullet point. It gives no details about your own musical activities and does not explain what help you would like from the singer, so the task is only partially addressed. The response also falls 20 words short of the required minimum, leaving little room to develop the missing points. To improve, add specific information about an instrument, lessons, or performances you take part in, then make a clear request—for example, advice, a meeting, or feedback on your singing.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The ideas are generally understandable and follow a basic sequence: you introduce the concert, describe your reaction, and close with thanks. However, nearly the entire message is placed in one long paragraph, and several ideas run together without clear punctuation or transitions. The repeated use of “and” makes the progression feel like a list rather than a shaped letter. The closing, “Your die hard fan,” is separated, but the letter would be easier to follow with distinct paragraphs for your reaction, your musical activities, and your request. Use full stops to separate complete thoughts and linking phrases such as “In addition” or “I am writing to ask whether” to guide the reader.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use enough vocabulary to communicate enthusiasm and personal feeling, including “great time,” “melts my heart,” and “tough time.” These phrases make your admiration clear, but the range is limited and some expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “very amazing” and “enjoy my time with you.” There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “attent” and “threw,” which can distract the reader. Aim for more precise language suited to a fan letter: describe the performance as “captivating” or “energetic,” and explain that a song “moved me deeply.” Proofread carefully for spelling and choose collocations that sound natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The message communicates its main meaning, and you attempt to connect ideas using clauses such as “I was going through a tough time and I don't regret…” However, the response relies heavily on simple structures joined into very long sentences, so grammatical control is uneven. For example, “i want” and “i had” need capital letters, while “one of my most loved song” has a number-agreement error. The sentence beginning “I attended your recent concert” also needs clearer punctuation to separate its ideas. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences and check capitalisation, articles, and singular/plural agreement. You can then add a few controlled complex sentences to explain your musical activities and request.
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