Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I am going to write this letter about last weekend concert which was in surrey central location. i visit their with my friends and we enjoyed your songs. Before that i listen that you voice is very nice in realty abd now i feel this by my heart.

i follow your social media accounts and listen your all songs on repeat because i like your music and the lyrics. i also wants to become a singer and i also write some songs and i teach in a school as a music teacher.

i know that everyone need to do hard work for become a famous singer and i see your all posdcast for get some motivation and gain knowledge from your story but i need your help for release my first song because i donot have much knowledge that what steps i need to follow for release a song. i hope you will help me for become a good singer like you.

thank you

mehakpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you describe enjoying the singer’s performance, explain that you write songs and teach music, and ask for help releasing your first song. The request is relevant and clear, especially where you explain that you are unsure which steps to follow. The performance praise is also personal, referring to hearing the singer live after listening to his music online. However, some ideas are only briefly developed: you could give a specific example of what impressed you in the performance and clarify what kind of guidance you want, such as advice on recording, promotion, or finding a producer. The letter communicates its purpose, but fuller supporting detail would make it more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information follows a generally sensible order: you introduce the concert, describe your interest and musical background, then make your request. This gives the letter an overall progression, and phrases such as “Before that” and “but” help connect ideas. However, the response is presented as one continuous block, so the shifts between the concert, your activities, and your request are not clearly signposted as separate stages. Some links are also awkward or unclear, particularly “i also wants to become a singer and i also write some songs,” where repeated “also” makes the connection mechanical. Use separate paragraphs and clearer transitions, and make references such as “this” more precise, to improve the flow and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough relevant vocabulary to communicate the main message, including “performance,” “lyrics,” “music teacher,” “motivation,” and “release my first song.” These choices show awareness of the topic, but the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make the writing less natural. For example, “listen your all songs on repeat” and “gain knowledge from your story” do not use natural English phrasing, while “reality” and “podcast” are misspelled in the response. Aim to learn common word partnerships and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary for the singer’s performance and the help you need would also make your letter clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates its main ideas, and you attempt to connect clauses using “because,” “that,” and “but.” However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to read smoothly. Examples include “i visit their” and “i also wants,” which show problems with verb tense and subject–verb agreement, as well as “i teach in a school as a music teacher,” where the sentence structure is awkward. Capitalisation and sentence punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then build longer sentences with subordinate clauses; check tense, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries during proofreading.

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