Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

• say how you feel about his performance
• give details of your musical activities
• explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Mr Mika,

I hope you doing well.

i just want to write let you know about your recent concert. first of all i am big fan of your songs. in a day lots of time i am listning your songs and like so much. recently i visited your concert which is happened in Chandigarh. it is really good managed function i love to visited their because your perfomance was to good the way of your dance on every songs its giveing me goosebumps.

the lightning on your stage its feels the the heaven on earth and the music performance was too good. your way of singing and the voice of mucical instuments touching the souls.orgniser orgnise proper. the setting arrangment was also awesome. and your dress code is also mathing the lights when you eneter in the concert its attract to everyone to look you. i feel really so happy beacuse of your live concert . i wish to join again in future like this kind of program i will never forget in my life

Thanks & Regard

your fan

ABC

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You clearly express enthusiasm for the singer’s performance, describing the dancing, stage lighting, and music, and you include a suitable closing. However, the task’s other two required points are not addressed: you do not explain your own musical activities, or say what specific help you would like from the singer. As a result, the letter only partially fulfils its purpose, despite the relevant concert details. To improve, add a short paragraph about whether you sing, play an instrument, or perform, then make a clear request—for example, advice, a lesson, or feedback on your music. This would make the content more complete and purposeful.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly understandable order: it opens with a greeting, describes the concert, and ends with thanks and a sign-off. Some sequencing is supported by phrases such as “first of all” and “recently,” but most of the concert details are crowded into one long paragraph, with several ideas joined by “and.” This makes the progression feel repetitive and occasionally difficult to follow. Grouping the performance comments together, then adding separate paragraphs for your musical activities and request, would make the letter easier to navigate. Clearer sentence boundaries and more varied linking would also help the reader see how each point relates to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary to convey your reaction, including “performance,” “concert,” “stage,” “dance,” and “voice,” and phrases such as “goosebumps” communicate strong enthusiasm. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. For example, “the music performance was too good” and “the setting arrangment was also awesome” rely on general praise rather than precise description. Spelling errors such as “listning,” “perfomance,” and “orgniser” also reduce accuracy. Build a wider set of natural collocations for music and live events, and check spelling carefully; this will let you describe what impressed you with greater precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The letter communicates its main reaction, but grammatical control is uneven, and sentence structures are mostly simple or joined together without clear boundaries. Examples include “I hope you doing well,” “which is happened in Chandigarh,” and “the way of your dance on every songs its giveing me goosebumps.” These show problems with verb forms, sentence construction, and agreement. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in the lowercase “i” and the long sequence of clauses in the concert description. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use past tense consistently when describing the concert. Breaking longer ideas into shorter sentences will make your meaning easier to follow.

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