Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You live in an apartment building where many people get parcels during the day. Your building manager, Ms Patel, recently asked people who live there to share ideas for making the shared entrance area better. You would like to write to her about a change that could make deliveries easier and safer for everyone in the building.

Write a letter to Ms Patel. In your letter

• ask Ms Patel to arrange for a secure parcel locker to be put in, and explain why it is needed
• describe the problems people in the building have when parcels are delivered
• suggest a simple plan for putting in and using the locker

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Ms Patel,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Ms patel,

I would like to express some solution for the problem of entrance area getting congested due to the parcel of local residents are receiving on a regular basis. As this problem can be resolve by making the changes in the building entrance area by addding place for delivery.

I found some place in the entreance area which can be utilised for arranging the parcel locker for each resident of apartment. Since, the corridor of the entrance area most of the time it is filled with the courier of the resident, as it makes harder for an inhabitant to exit or enter the building. Sometime I slept away duw to the parcel on the ground that lead me to back injury which took 2 months to treat. I believe that above idea of putting locker in the entrance area where the delivery person can put the courier in the locker as it is locked with the code so everyone need to add code in the address.

Yours faithfully,

Anuj Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main purpose by asking for a parcel locker and explaining that deliveries clutter the entrance and can create a safety risk. The personal example—slipping on a parcel and sustaining an injury—makes the need clear and relevant. However, the request is not stated directly as a request to Ms Patel to arrange installation, and the proposed plan is incomplete: you mention a locker and a code, but do not explain how residents would receive or use codes, or how the locker could be installed and managed. The problems are also described mainly through congestion and your own accident rather than a fuller account of residents’ difficulties. Develop these points and make the requested action explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a recognisable sequence: it introduces the entrance problem, describes the available space and safety concern, then proposes a locker. The closing is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the ideas are packed into two long paragraphs, and the progression is not always easy to follow. For example, the opening sentence combines the problem and its cause, while the next sentence’s phrase “by addding place for delivery” does not clearly connect the proposed solution to the request. The transition “Since” also introduces a sentence that is difficult to complete logically. Use separate paragraphs for the request, the problems, and the practical plan, and connect each point with clear, accurate linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “entrance area,” “courier,” “parcel locker,” “corridor,” and “back injury.” These choices help communicate the topic, and the specific injury adds useful detail. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “express some solution,” “the courier of the resident,” and “add code in the address.” Spelling errors such as “entreance,” “addding,” and “duw” also reduce accuracy. Aim for natural phrases such as “suggest a solution,” “parcels left by couriers,” and “include the access code in the delivery instructions.” Check spelling and choose words that precisely describe the delivery process.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to use longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example, “Since, the corridor of the entrance area most of the time it is filled…” and “as it makes harder for an inhabitant to exit or enter.” These attempts show some range, but the structures are often faulty, and several sentences require the reader to work out the intended meaning. There are problems with articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction: “a solution,” “the corridor … is filled,” and “it makes it harder” would be more accurate patterns. The final sentence also joins several ideas without a clear grammatical structure. Practise building a clear simple sentence first, then add one subordinate clause, and check each sentence for a complete subject and verb.

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