Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You live in an apartment building where many people get parcels during the day. Your building manager, Ms Patel, recently asked people who live there to share ideas for making the shared entrance area better. You would like to write to her about a change that could make deliveries easier and safer for everyone in the building.

Write a letter to Ms Patel. In your letter

• ask Ms Patel to arrange for a secure parcel locker to be put in, and explain why it is needed
• describe the problems people in the building have when parcels are delivered
• suggest a simple plan for putting in and using the locker

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Ms Patel,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

dear sir.

I am appreciate that you want everyone recommendation about making deliveries facilitate and unbroken in entrance area. Regarding this I want to share my thought with you.

Firstly, are you arranging locker for parcels safety ? That would be great idea to keep everyone deliveries safe and private. It also protect their parcel from thieves.

we have to face lots of problem while receiving parcel. Sometime delivery boy get confused with house no. and block no of apartment. Moreover, we have to available at home on package delivery date otherwise they take parcel back. In addition, most of time they deliver parcel on wrong address.

To resolve the issue, I have simple idea for putting in. As my perception it should put near the elevator because this place is easy accessible for everyone and we should call society meeting to guide everyone how to use it.

I hope you would understand our problems and suggestions I recommend to you.

Regard,

Devinder

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you ask about arranging a locker, explain that parcels may be taken back or delivered to the wrong address, and suggest placing the locker near the elevator and holding a meeting to explain its use. These are relevant ideas and the purpose of the letter is generally clear. However, some parts are less fully developed than others. For example, you mention confusion over house and block numbers but do not explain how the locker system would prevent this, and the plan does not say how residents would access parcels or how deliveries would be placed in the locker. Also, the task specifies Ms Patel, so use her name and a suitable formal greeting rather than “dear sir.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable progression: an opening, a description of delivery problems, a proposed solution, and a closing. Sequencing phrases such as “Firstly,” “Moreover,” and “In addition” help the reader follow the points, and the main ideas are grouped in a sensible order. At times, however, these links feel mechanical, and the relationship between ideas is not always clear. For instance, the question about arranging a locker is followed by reasons for it, but a direct request would make the purpose clearer. The final paragraph combines the location suggestion and residents’ guidance without explaining the practical steps. Use clearer paragraphing and connect each problem to a specific feature of the proposed plan.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a range of task-related vocabulary, including “deliveries,” “parcel,” “thieves,” “wrong address,” and “accessible,” so the reader can understand the main concerns. However, several word choices and collocations are noticeably inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision. For example, “making deliveries facilitate and unbroken” does not clearly express making deliveries easier and safer, while “everyone recommendation” and “my thought” are not natural in this context. “Delivery boy” is also less appropriate than “delivery driver” or “courier.” Aim to learn useful phrases as complete combinations, such as “secure parcel locker,” “miss a delivery,” and “collect a parcel,” and check word forms and spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, including a conditional idea in “otherwise they take parcel back” and a reason clause explaining why the locker should be near the elevator. The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. Examples include “I am appreciate,” “It also protect,” and “we have to available at home,” where verb forms or sentence structure are incorrect. Articles and plurals also need attention, as in “a great idea,” “lots of problem,” and “take parcel back.” Practise forming complete clauses with accurate subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, then check articles and plural nouns. More accurate control of these structures would make your suggestions easier to follow.

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